Title: Cold Love
Author: PeperminT (Omi)
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/PeperminT
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ Ideas
Title: 4/5
I like your title. It really explains what's the story all about. =D
First Impression: 6/10
Your poster looks plain and all. But still, It looks good. ^^
Forewords: 5/10
Your introduction wasn't that interesting at all. You even revealed that Nichkhun was sick. Although I like your plot but It would be better to give some suspense to your readers. That way, They would really pay attention to your story.
Plot: 13/15
Like I said, I like your plot especially It was a true story which you had experienced. Realistic, I'm impressed. ^^
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
Although your poster looks plain, But I can still see your determination to make this as your very own. Good Job !
Flow: 10/10
I like the flow. I don't often give a perfect score but I really like your story. It's really realistic. I'll give you credit for that. =D
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 5/10
You should really work on your punctuation, spelling & grammar. We reviewers are very strict especially when It comes to spelling & grammar. Try to read books to enhance your vocabulary.
Characterization: 9/10
I like everyone's part on your story. Nice !
Writing Style: 9/10
It really doesn't matter what kind of writing style you wrote, Important thing is that I, everyone and especially you can visualize your story.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I had a great time reading your story with tears along the way, ="]
Sub Total: 78/100
Bonus: 3/5
Total: 81/100
I hope I didn't offend the author in any way. I have nothing against the author nor their story. This is strictly being professional towards my job. Thank you for requesting at Ideas. It was a pleasure to have the chance to review your story. I hope you like your score. Thank You & God Bless ! =D
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Monday, August 31, 2009
Thursday, August 20, 2009
Love is a Mystery that No one can Solve by DarkAngel/Animeangel1997
Title: Love is a Mystery that No can Solve
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/animeangel1997/
Author: DarkAngel / Animeangel1997
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ Thrashing-Ideas
Title: 3/5
Honestly, The title isn't really that catchy since it's too long so, I have to disagree with you on that. And every letter should be capitalized.
First Impression: 7/10
Although It's just like Pi Li MIT, I still appreciate your hard work in making this plot your very own. ^^ And the poster isn't really catchy since it looks so plain.
(No offense to the graphic designer, This is simply MY own opinion... )
Forewords: 9/10
It's interesting actually, I like how you gave a small brief about themselves. And If I have not mistaken, Your 12 ? If you are, I'm impressed how you describe them. Great Job ! I'll give you credit for that.
Plot: 13/15
I love it ! Although It's similar to Pi Li MIT, But I won't disagree with this one. You managed to make your own twist and turns actually, I'm impressed.
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
I may say, You really surprised me. Every chapter is getting interesting. I'm starting to like your story. Keep It Up !
Flow: 10/10
Perfect ! Your flow ain't too fast or too slow.. Like I said, It's perfect. ^^
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
You have to work on your grammar although I really didn't manage to see MAJOR errors, But it would be better if you try to increase your vocabulary. That way, It wouldn't be hard for you to describe them how they feel when they talk.
Characterization: 10/10
I like it. I think your doing a great job !
Writing Style: 9/10
Like I always say, It doesn't matter what kind of writing style you did. The important thing is that the readers and especially you can understand and feel the emotions of the story. Without this, It's useless.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Ha Ha ! Do you still need to ask me this question ? =]
Sub Total: 85/100
Bonus: 5/5
Well done DarkAngel ! Jiayu ! ^^
Total: 90/100
Thank you for choosing me to review your story. It was an honor, Thank you. And I hope that I didn't offend my writer at all... I'm simply doing my work with honesty and being fair to every story I'm reviewing to. I have nothing against the writer nor their story. Good Bless ! Hope you enjoy your rating ! ^^
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/animeangel1997/
Author: DarkAngel / Animeangel1997
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ Thrashing-Ideas
Title: 3/5
Honestly, The title isn't really that catchy since it's too long so, I have to disagree with you on that. And every letter should be capitalized.
First Impression: 7/10
Although It's just like Pi Li MIT, I still appreciate your hard work in making this plot your very own. ^^ And the poster isn't really catchy since it looks so plain.
(No offense to the graphic designer, This is simply MY own opinion... )
Forewords: 9/10
It's interesting actually, I like how you gave a small brief about themselves. And If I have not mistaken, Your 12 ? If you are, I'm impressed how you describe them. Great Job ! I'll give you credit for that.
Plot: 13/15
I love it ! Although It's similar to Pi Li MIT, But I won't disagree with this one. You managed to make your own twist and turns actually, I'm impressed.
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
I may say, You really surprised me. Every chapter is getting interesting. I'm starting to like your story. Keep It Up !
Flow: 10/10
Perfect ! Your flow ain't too fast or too slow.. Like I said, It's perfect. ^^
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
You have to work on your grammar although I really didn't manage to see MAJOR errors, But it would be better if you try to increase your vocabulary. That way, It wouldn't be hard for you to describe them how they feel when they talk.
Characterization: 10/10
I like it. I think your doing a great job !
Writing Style: 9/10
Like I always say, It doesn't matter what kind of writing style you did. The important thing is that the readers and especially you can understand and feel the emotions of the story. Without this, It's useless.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Ha Ha ! Do you still need to ask me this question ? =]
Sub Total: 85/100
Bonus: 5/5
Well done DarkAngel ! Jiayu ! ^^
Total: 90/100
Thank you for choosing me to review your story. It was an honor, Thank you. And I hope that I didn't offend my writer at all... I'm simply doing my work with honesty and being fair to every story I'm reviewing to. I have nothing against the writer nor their story. Good Bless ! Hope you enjoy your rating ! ^^
Friday, July 24, 2009
Be My Escape by Jtoasn
Title: Be My Escape
Author: Jtoasn
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/Jtoasn/
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 3/5
Your title wasn't really catchy at all...
First Impression: 8/10
I like the poster. It looks fun and filled with enjoyment... ^^
Forewords: 8/10
Interesting. 3 months ? Living together and make an album ?? Keep It Up !
Plot: 14/15
So far, This is my first time reading this kind of plot. Great !
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Your creativity and originality is visible in your storyline. I'm impressed...
Flow: 7/10
It's kinda rush when the news broke... But, I can see your effort in your story so try to balance the flow. ^^
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:
5/10 Sorry for giving you a low score in this section but you really need to improve your markings and all like...
Ex.
You wrote:
"Hyung, can you pass me that plate" Sungmin asked.
Correct:
"Hyung, Can you pass me that plate ?" Sungmin asked.
But regarding with your grammar, I spotted some errors but seeing your determination, It makes up for your slight mistakes. Keep It Up !
Characterization: 8/10
The way they share their conversation with each other really tells about their personality. And I have to admit, They're really funny ! =]
Writing Style:
8/10 It doesn't matter what kind of writing style you did but the important thing is that the readers could visualize it and feel the emotion... ^^
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I had a great time reading your story !
Sub Total: 78/100
Bonus: 3/5
Total: 81/100
I hope I didn't offend you in any way and I hope you take this as a compliment. We reviewers, are here to help motivate authors to be creative and have their sense of originality... God Bless ! Hope you enjoy ! Jiayou ! ^^
Author: Jtoasn
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/Jtoasn/
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 3/5
Your title wasn't really catchy at all...
First Impression: 8/10
I like the poster. It looks fun and filled with enjoyment... ^^
Forewords: 8/10
Interesting. 3 months ? Living together and make an album ?? Keep It Up !
Plot: 14/15
So far, This is my first time reading this kind of plot. Great !
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Your creativity and originality is visible in your storyline. I'm impressed...
Flow: 7/10
It's kinda rush when the news broke... But, I can see your effort in your story so try to balance the flow. ^^
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary:
5/10 Sorry for giving you a low score in this section but you really need to improve your markings and all like...
Ex.
You wrote:
"Hyung, can you pass me that plate" Sungmin asked.
Correct:
"Hyung, Can you pass me that plate ?" Sungmin asked.
But regarding with your grammar, I spotted some errors but seeing your determination, It makes up for your slight mistakes. Keep It Up !
Characterization: 8/10
The way they share their conversation with each other really tells about their personality. And I have to admit, They're really funny ! =]
Writing Style:
8/10 It doesn't matter what kind of writing style you did but the important thing is that the readers could visualize it and feel the emotion... ^^
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I had a great time reading your story !
Sub Total: 78/100
Bonus: 3/5
Total: 81/100
I hope I didn't offend you in any way and I hope you take this as a compliment. We reviewers, are here to help motivate authors to be creative and have their sense of originality... God Bless ! Hope you enjoy ! Jiayou ! ^^
Thursday, July 23, 2009
Clown Love by Xiaoxi
Title: Clown Love
Author: Xiaoxi
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/clownlove
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
So mysterious, It gives a lot of curiousness and excitement. =]
First Impression: 8/10
Like the poster ! It's cool and it increases their interests in your story if you have an awesome background and poster for it. ^^
Forewords: 10/10
Bravo ! Love the introductions and the "so called" interview. This is really something... =]
Plot: 13/15
It's unique ! It's like a story of a person who always like to smile and laugh on the outside but hides all the misery inside and never reveals it.
Creativity/Originality: 15/15
You are one of a kind, Impressive ! =]
Flow: 8/10
It wasn't too slow it wasn't too fast, Everything was just fine. =]
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
Maybe you can say that some of your grammar wasn't simplified like, "He is wearing" And it should be, "He's wearing". ^^ But that's okay, since you really didn't have any major errors. Just some shortcuts... =]
Characterization: 10/10
Do you still need to ask me that ?? Please, I enjoyed every little detail ! ^^
Writing Style: 10/10
Like I always say in other reviews, (For other reviewers and of course me ! But not everyone =] ) That whatever writing style you did, The most important thing is, You can understand and visualized it. Cause if you can't even understand the thing you've written and you try to make us understand instead, Then it's useless. ^^
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
A blast ! Good job by the way... =]
Sub Total: 91/100
Bonus: 4/5
Total: 95/100
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I'm sorry If I'm not your preferred reviewer since yuebo was resigning, So... Thank you for letting me review your story instead. =] And I would like to apologize if I have offended you in any way. ^^ This is to help authors to rise up and improve their talent ! Remember, not everyone can do this...Cause not everyone has incredible imaginations like us. =] Thank You ! Hope You Enjoy The Review ! =]
Author: Xiaoxi
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/clownlove
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
So mysterious, It gives a lot of curiousness and excitement. =]
First Impression: 8/10
Like the poster ! It's cool and it increases their interests in your story if you have an awesome background and poster for it. ^^
Forewords: 10/10
Bravo ! Love the introductions and the "so called" interview. This is really something... =]
Plot: 13/15
It's unique ! It's like a story of a person who always like to smile and laugh on the outside but hides all the misery inside and never reveals it.
Creativity/Originality: 15/15
You are one of a kind, Impressive ! =]
Flow: 8/10
It wasn't too slow it wasn't too fast, Everything was just fine. =]
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
Maybe you can say that some of your grammar wasn't simplified like, "He is wearing" And it should be, "He's wearing". ^^ But that's okay, since you really didn't have any major errors. Just some shortcuts... =]
Characterization: 10/10
Do you still need to ask me that ?? Please, I enjoyed every little detail ! ^^
Writing Style: 10/10
Like I always say in other reviews, (For other reviewers and of course me ! But not everyone =] ) That whatever writing style you did, The most important thing is, You can understand and visualized it. Cause if you can't even understand the thing you've written and you try to make us understand instead, Then it's useless. ^^
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
A blast ! Good job by the way... =]
Sub Total: 91/100
Bonus: 4/5
Total: 95/100
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I'm sorry If I'm not your preferred reviewer since yuebo was resigning, So... Thank you for letting me review your story instead. =] And I would like to apologize if I have offended you in any way. ^^ This is to help authors to rise up and improve their talent ! Remember, not everyone can do this...Cause not everyone has incredible imaginations like us. =] Thank You ! Hope You Enjoy The Review ! =]
Friday, June 26, 2009
Star Lover by Riz-2611
Title: Star Lover
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/riz03/
Author: Riz-2611
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
The title is kinda catchy...
First Impression: 8/10
Like the poster and background. It gives off a good feeling about your story...
Forewords: 8/10
So interesting !
Plot: 7/15
It's not the first time I've read this kind of plots. And to tell you the truth, you
need more improvement.
Creativity/Originality: 6/15
You need more improvement to imagine more realistic story lines.
Flow: 4/10
To tell you the truth, some chapters are a mess...
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 2/10
You have multiple errors but I would just like to show
you some errors so that you can improve and edit your story.
1. (Chapter 7)
You said:
Jiro’s POV
Ella, you are my friend. I will never let you to be suffering again.
End POV
*Correct:
Jiro's POV
Ella, you are my friend. I don't want to see you suffering again.
End POV
2. You said:
Dr. Lim: I will not let you to do that!
*Correct:
Dr. Lim: I will not allow you to do so !
3. You said:
Dr. Lim: I take care of you when you was little until now, I would never let you do that!
*Correct:
I took care of you when you were still little and until now. I won't allow you to do this to yourself !
4.You said:
Ella: That is a lie! I never get healthy! My cancer spread to my other system in my body and I don’t want it to spread into my heart!
*Correct:
Ella: That's a lie, I will never be healthy again ! The cancer already spread to my other systems in my body and I don't want it to affect my heart !
5.You said:
Lim: He wants to talk to you but me illegal him to do that.
*Correct:
Lim: He wants to talk to you but I forbid him to do so since were going to operate soon.
Characterization: 8/10
I like how you gave a small brief about their love life. =]
Writing Style: 5/10
It doesn't matter what kind of style you do, the most important this is,
the reader can imagine your story and can feel the emotions and understand your story fully which that's what you lack in your story.
Overall Enjoyment: 2/5
I think they were a little childish. A person whose in a critical condition, even if they hate him/her for the sake of their loved one or a close friend, they should be mature enough to act their own age especially their profession is all about saving lives !
Sub Total: 46/100
Bonus: 0/5
I'm sorry but you really need improvement with your grammar... =]
Total: 46/100
Oh no ! This is the first review I gave a small grade. =[ I'm sorry if I have offended you in any
way but I'm just doing my job as a fair reviewer. =] It hurts for me to give you a low score. I don't want to pull down writers instead, encourage them to practice more. So I would like to
recommend you to a site so that the next time you would do a story, you can let them edit
it for you or you can learn to increase your vocabulary by taking lessons in tutorials. (I'm not sure if all sites have tutorials... =] ) I would like to help you cause I believe your a very
good writer, you just need improvement... Thank you for giving me a chance to review your story and i hope you would take my comments as a compliment.... ^^ Have A Nice Day!
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/riz03/
Author: Riz-2611
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
The title is kinda catchy...
First Impression: 8/10
Like the poster and background. It gives off a good feeling about your story...
Forewords: 8/10
So interesting !
Plot: 7/15
It's not the first time I've read this kind of plots. And to tell you the truth, you
need more improvement.
Creativity/Originality: 6/15
You need more improvement to imagine more realistic story lines.
Flow: 4/10
To tell you the truth, some chapters are a mess...
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 2/10
You have multiple errors but I would just like to show
you some errors so that you can improve and edit your story.
1. (Chapter 7)
You said:
Jiro’s POV
Ella, you are my friend. I will never let you to be suffering again.
End POV
*Correct:
Jiro's POV
Ella, you are my friend. I don't want to see you suffering again.
End POV
2. You said:
Dr. Lim: I will not let you to do that!
*Correct:
Dr. Lim: I will not allow you to do so !
3. You said:
Dr. Lim: I take care of you when you was little until now, I would never let you do that!
*Correct:
I took care of you when you were still little and until now. I won't allow you to do this to yourself !
4.You said:
Ella: That is a lie! I never get healthy! My cancer spread to my other system in my body and I don’t want it to spread into my heart!
*Correct:
Ella: That's a lie, I will never be healthy again ! The cancer already spread to my other systems in my body and I don't want it to affect my heart !
5.You said:
Lim: He wants to talk to you but me illegal him to do that.
*Correct:
Lim: He wants to talk to you but I forbid him to do so since were going to operate soon.
Characterization: 8/10
I like how you gave a small brief about their love life. =]
Writing Style: 5/10
It doesn't matter what kind of style you do, the most important this is,
the reader can imagine your story and can feel the emotions and understand your story fully which that's what you lack in your story.
Overall Enjoyment: 2/5
I think they were a little childish. A person whose in a critical condition, even if they hate him/her for the sake of their loved one or a close friend, they should be mature enough to act their own age especially their profession is all about saving lives !
Sub Total: 46/100
Bonus: 0/5
I'm sorry but you really need improvement with your grammar... =]
Total: 46/100
Oh no ! This is the first review I gave a small grade. =[ I'm sorry if I have offended you in any
way but I'm just doing my job as a fair reviewer. =] It hurts for me to give you a low score. I don't want to pull down writers instead, encourage them to practice more. So I would like to
recommend you to a site so that the next time you would do a story, you can let them edit
it for you or you can learn to increase your vocabulary by taking lessons in tutorials. (I'm not sure if all sites have tutorials... =] ) I would like to help you cause I believe your a very
good writer, you just need improvement... Thank you for giving me a chance to review your story and i hope you would take my comments as a compliment.... ^^ Have A Nice Day!
It's you; Cinderella without glass slippers by Pink Princess
Title: It's you; Cinderella without glass slippers
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/neorago_AS/
Author : Pink Princess
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5 I actually I like the title cause it represents a sad and romance story line. I would want to give you a perfect score for that but the first letter in each word should be capitalized... =]
First Impression: 10/10
The background and poster fits your story well, Great Job !
Forewords: 9/10
It's very interesting the way you made it a bed time story. =]
Plot: 15/15
Now this is what you call TRUE LOVE ! I'm impressed.
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Your very creative and your good in imagining things. Keep It Up ! =]
Flow: 8/10
Sometimes I get confused to whom is being talked about or the one talking. (But it didn't affect the flow at all =] )
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
I've seen one, and I think you just accidentally scrambled the word so yeah... =] But, it really doesn't matter, cause your plot rocks !
Characterization: 9/10
Like I said, sometimes I get confused but seeing your determination
and being creative, It makes up for your slight errors...
Writing Style: 9/10
It doesn't matter what writing style you do, just let the reader imagine or let him/her feel the emotions and understand the story fully. And that's already enough.. =]
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
It's so sweet..! I really felt moved what Sungmin said... ="]
Sub Total: 91/100
Bonus: 5/5
Wow, you already have 91 points in sub total of your story ! =] But anyway, I would just like to tell you that I really liked your story and it made me float for awhile.. =] So here you go, plus 5 bonus.. Enjoy ! =]
Total: 96/100
Thank you for choosing me to review your fanfic. =] I had fun ^^ and I hope I didn't offend you
in any way at all..And I'm sorry for reviewing this only today cause I'm really busy with my schedule, hope you understand. =] Anyway, keep it up ! Your an outstanding writer and I do
believe in the future that you would be a guide to those who wants to be like you. =]
Enjoy..! ^^
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/neorago_AS/
Author : Pink Princess
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5 I actually I like the title cause it represents a sad and romance story line. I would want to give you a perfect score for that but the first letter in each word should be capitalized... =]
First Impression: 10/10
The background and poster fits your story well, Great Job !
Forewords: 9/10
It's very interesting the way you made it a bed time story. =]
Plot: 15/15
Now this is what you call TRUE LOVE ! I'm impressed.
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Your very creative and your good in imagining things. Keep It Up ! =]
Flow: 8/10
Sometimes I get confused to whom is being talked about or the one talking. (But it didn't affect the flow at all =] )
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
I've seen one, and I think you just accidentally scrambled the word so yeah... =] But, it really doesn't matter, cause your plot rocks !
Characterization: 9/10
Like I said, sometimes I get confused but seeing your determination
and being creative, It makes up for your slight errors...
Writing Style: 9/10
It doesn't matter what writing style you do, just let the reader imagine or let him/her feel the emotions and understand the story fully. And that's already enough.. =]
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
It's so sweet..! I really felt moved what Sungmin said... ="]
Sub Total: 91/100
Bonus: 5/5
Wow, you already have 91 points in sub total of your story ! =] But anyway, I would just like to tell you that I really liked your story and it made me float for awhile.. =] So here you go, plus 5 bonus.. Enjoy ! =]
Total: 96/100
Thank you for choosing me to review your fanfic. =] I had fun ^^ and I hope I didn't offend you
in any way at all..And I'm sorry for reviewing this only today cause I'm really busy with my schedule, hope you understand. =] Anyway, keep it up ! Your an outstanding writer and I do
believe in the future that you would be a guide to those who wants to be like you. =]
Enjoy..! ^^
Sunday, June 7, 2009
Lost Prince [One- Shot~MysCious Challenge] by SushiLove
Title: Lost Prince [One- Shot~MysCious Challenge]
Author: SushiLove
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/chunellaism_3/
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
I could feel the sadness just by reading the title... ="]
First Impression: 9/10
The background and the poster really explains the sad feeling of your story. They had contrast, that's why they compliment each other.
Forewords: 8/10
Sadness was the first word that popped into my mind. How I felt sorry for her, how she
never had a normal life because of her illness...
Plot: 12/15
Although I have read this kind of plot for a thousand times, but it was different. Everybody can make the same plot, It's just how they make their twist and turns...And how they can
satisfy the readers with their climax. So I'm impressed with your story in some ways. =]
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Like I said, I've read this kind of plots for a thousand times ! But because of your creativity and imagination, It accomplished to be a unique one.
Flow: 5/10
They fell in love instantly. It was so fast ! You should have put more events to make it more realistic. Although this is like a fairy tale story, but you should have made it more realistic enough though.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
I've seen minor errors. But the fact that you did your best and this is your first one-shot fiction, you did pretty well... =]
Characterization: 9/10
I like how you just gave a short detail about the casts. Because in this kind of story, readers
will concentrate with the plot although they would also be more interested if the casts are hot and pretty. =] But in this kind of story, it's exceptional because of the wonderful plot you imagined. Great Job !
Writing Style: 8/10
It doesn't matter what kind of writing style. The most important thing is, the readers should understand and feel the emotions in your story.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I'm not really into Korean fanfics, but this story really made me full of tears... ='']
So sad !
Sub Total: 79/100
Bonus: 5/5
Giving you a 5 ? Cause I can see your efforts in your story ! Any questions ? =]
Total: 84/100
I hope I didn't offend you in any way. =] This comments will increase your imagination. ^^
Thank you for letting me have this opportunity to review your story. Enjoy !
Author: SushiLove
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/chunellaism_3/
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
I could feel the sadness just by reading the title... ="]
First Impression: 9/10
The background and the poster really explains the sad feeling of your story. They had contrast, that's why they compliment each other.
Forewords: 8/10
Sadness was the first word that popped into my mind. How I felt sorry for her, how she
never had a normal life because of her illness...
Plot: 12/15
Although I have read this kind of plot for a thousand times, but it was different. Everybody can make the same plot, It's just how they make their twist and turns...And how they can
satisfy the readers with their climax. So I'm impressed with your story in some ways. =]
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
Like I said, I've read this kind of plots for a thousand times ! But because of your creativity and imagination, It accomplished to be a unique one.
Flow: 5/10
They fell in love instantly. It was so fast ! You should have put more events to make it more realistic. Although this is like a fairy tale story, but you should have made it more realistic enough though.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
I've seen minor errors. But the fact that you did your best and this is your first one-shot fiction, you did pretty well... =]
Characterization: 9/10
I like how you just gave a short detail about the casts. Because in this kind of story, readers
will concentrate with the plot although they would also be more interested if the casts are hot and pretty. =] But in this kind of story, it's exceptional because of the wonderful plot you imagined. Great Job !
Writing Style: 8/10
It doesn't matter what kind of writing style. The most important thing is, the readers should understand and feel the emotions in your story.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I'm not really into Korean fanfics, but this story really made me full of tears... ='']
So sad !
Sub Total: 79/100
Bonus: 5/5
Giving you a 5 ? Cause I can see your efforts in your story ! Any questions ? =]
Total: 84/100
I hope I didn't offend you in any way. =] This comments will increase your imagination. ^^
Thank you for letting me have this opportunity to review your story. Enjoy !
Wednesday, June 3, 2009
Stupid And Idiotic Love Story by Sam
Title: Stupid And Idiotic Love Story
Author: Sam
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/chunellaism_3/
Status: Completed
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 2/5
I like your title but I would prefer if It was shorter and each first words should be capitalized.
First Impression: 9/10
When I first read the forewords, I got excited and curious. . .. ! ^^ And love the poster and background ! It suits it well. . . !
Forewords: 8/10
It's funny how you described them. =]
Plot: 15/15
I'll give you a perfect score since you did your best and the plot was awesome ! Although I had goosebumps in some parts of the story. =] Cheesy. . . ! =]
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
Seeing your plot, storyline and writing style,
You have a great ability.
Flow: 9/10
I like the way you put up with Ella. Making her expressionless and cold makes it more interesting to when she'll return to her own self again.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 5/10
You should check your capitalization and how to use commas, periods, question marks and exclamation point.
Characterization: 10/10
I like how you characterize them.So bubbly, cute & funny ! In short, Hilarious ! =]
Writing Style: 7/10
I get sometimes confuse whose talking or whose referring to. But I still like your originality.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
It was enjoyable and hilarious ! I laughed in some parts and had goosebumps at the same time because of the cheesiness. But all in all, It was awesome. =]
Sub Total: 81/100
Bonus: 5/5
You know why I'm giving you a 5 ? because it was fantastic and I had a great time reading it. ^^
Total: 86/100
*I'm sorry if there's in any way that I have offended you, I apologize for my comments. =]
Enjoy your review ! Hope you like it. =]
Author: Sam
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/chunellaism_3/
Status: Completed
Reviewed By: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 2/5
I like your title but I would prefer if It was shorter and each first words should be capitalized.
First Impression: 9/10
When I first read the forewords, I got excited and curious. . .. ! ^^ And love the poster and background ! It suits it well. . . !
Forewords: 8/10
It's funny how you described them. =]
Plot: 15/15
I'll give you a perfect score since you did your best and the plot was awesome ! Although I had goosebumps in some parts of the story. =] Cheesy. . . ! =]
Creativity/Originality: 12/15
Seeing your plot, storyline and writing style,
You have a great ability.
Flow: 9/10
I like the way you put up with Ella. Making her expressionless and cold makes it more interesting to when she'll return to her own self again.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 5/10
You should check your capitalization and how to use commas, periods, question marks and exclamation point.
Characterization: 10/10
I like how you characterize them.So bubbly, cute & funny ! In short, Hilarious ! =]
Writing Style: 7/10
I get sometimes confuse whose talking or whose referring to. But I still like your originality.
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
It was enjoyable and hilarious ! I laughed in some parts and had goosebumps at the same time because of the cheesiness. But all in all, It was awesome. =]
Sub Total: 81/100
Bonus: 5/5
You know why I'm giving you a 5 ? because it was fantastic and I had a great time reading it. ^^
Total: 86/100
*I'm sorry if there's in any way that I have offended you, I apologize for my comments. =]
Enjoy your review ! Hope you like it. =]
Tuesday, June 2, 2009
May I Kiss You? by I {heart} DaeEun~
Title: May I Kiss You?
Author: I{heart}DaeEun~
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/I_heart_DaeEun/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
I like the title, it's like filled with excitement...
First Impression: 7/10
Honestly, I'm not into Korean fanfics. However, continuously reading, I felt interested. . .^^
Forewords: 6/10
I like the way you paired the casts but you should have put some questions. for example. .
1. Why did he leave. . ?
2. Will he ever come back. . ?
like that for example. . =]
Plot: 10/15
There was no relation with a high school life and with a gang who likes pretty girls. . .but anyway, It was hilarious...At the beginning of course. . .
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
It's the first time I read this kind of plot. . ! Based on your creativeness, You are very creative in different ways. . . It'll show how you can be creative by the way you create your
plot, writing and story line of course.. . .
Flow: 8/10
The fact that the plot was kinda *woo* I mean "no relevance", But it was hilarious. . !
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
So far, you don't really have major errors. . .
Characterization: 5/10
It would be better if you explained more about YeEun and DaeSung. . . Even just the two of them, since the others were minors. . . Even a simple background about their lives. . .
Writing Style: 8/10
Different from the others, I'm impressed. . . I like the your style. . .
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I'm excited to know what's going to happen next. . .
Will they be still together..??
Can't wait. . . !
Sub Total: 74/100
Bonus: 3/5
It was one of a kind. . ! I like the humor and the sadness of course in the last chapter. . .
Total: 77/100
If you have been offended in some other way, I apologize. . . But this would help you improve your imaginations. . . Thank You. . .! Keep It Up. . .! =]
Author: I{heart}DaeEun~
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/I_heart_DaeEun/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Ronix ^^ @ RawrOutLoud
Title: 4/5
I like the title, it's like filled with excitement...
First Impression: 7/10
Honestly, I'm not into Korean fanfics. However, continuously reading, I felt interested. . .^^
Forewords: 6/10
I like the way you paired the casts but you should have put some questions. for example. .
1. Why did he leave. . ?
2. Will he ever come back. . ?
like that for example. . =]
Plot: 10/15
There was no relation with a high school life and with a gang who likes pretty girls. . .but anyway, It was hilarious...At the beginning of course. . .
Creativity/Originality: 13/15
It's the first time I read this kind of plot. . ! Based on your creativeness, You are very creative in different ways. . . It'll show how you can be creative by the way you create your
plot, writing and story line of course.. . .
Flow: 8/10
The fact that the plot was kinda *woo* I mean "no relevance", But it was hilarious. . !
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
So far, you don't really have major errors. . .
Characterization: 5/10
It would be better if you explained more about YeEun and DaeSung. . . Even just the two of them, since the others were minors. . . Even a simple background about their lives. . .
Writing Style: 8/10
Different from the others, I'm impressed. . . I like the your style. . .
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
I'm excited to know what's going to happen next. . .
Will they be still together..??
Can't wait. . . !
Sub Total: 74/100
Bonus: 3/5
It was one of a kind. . ! I like the humor and the sadness of course in the last chapter. . .
Total: 77/100
If you have been offended in some other way, I apologize. . . But this would help you improve your imaginations. . . Thank You. . .! Keep It Up. . .! =]
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