Author : HidayahF
Title : Disturbia
Link : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Disturbia
Status : On-going
Reviewer : sweetbunn @ RawrOutLoud
Warning : The reviewer has nothing against the author. This is just an honest and strict review which will help the author to improve himself/herself in the next attempt of writing a story. Please do not get angry if there any unpleasant comments.
Title: 2/5
its not related to the story i was really thinking about that
Poster/Background: -/10
there is no background and poster
Forewords: 5/10
the introduction was really intereting but more will be interesting was the synopsis
Plot: 10/15
its still not yet done but its really interesting
Creativity/Originality: 10/15
i always seen the playboy thingy and the acting thingy
Flow: 8/10
its really good
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
as far i can see there is none so keep the good work
characterisation: 10/10
its really represent the appearances
Writing Style: 7/10
Overall Enjoynment :3/5
i really enjoy this but i think you should write some pranks or some funny movements
Sub Total :65/100
bonus : 4/5
keep the good work JIA YOU!
Total : 69/100
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