Sweet Surrender by Karin

Title: Sweet Surrender
Author: Karin
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/Orphey
Reviewed by: Andi @ i-DEAS

Title: 5/5
I really liked the title! Since I am such a nerd, it was because it was like an oxymoron. Kind of like saying “sweet agony,” or something along those lines. Surrender, as far as I’m concerned, is not sweet. So I don’t know if you were aiming at the oxymoron thing, but that is what caught my eye.

First Impression: 9/10
Literally: I screamed when I saw Aoi on the poster. I was reading your fic at school, and my teacher thought a killer was in the computer lab, so she freaked. But I hardly ever see any fanfics concerning ANY J-ROCKERS! OMG, I love the GazettE! They so freaking rock. Your poster wasn’t overcrowded, and I liked how the central character of the story—Hikari—was in the center of the poster. The designer did an awesome job.

Forewords: 6/10
Please, just please do not ever sum up your story. Unless it’s in a chapter, catching people up in case they may have forgotten some key points, do not do it. Instead of a summary, give a little preview or list who’s who. Summaries, in my opinion, are pointless. Who wants a summary of a story they want to read? Summaries are for people who haven’t done their summer reading and need to get it done quickly.

Plot: 12/15
Eh, I’ve read a lot of stories where the friend from back in the day comes back, and the two characters fall in love. It was enjoyable, nonetheless.

Creativity/Originality: 12/15
As I said above, there are a lot of stories out there like yours. However, there are not a lot of stories out there involving the greatest j-rock band in the world, so you got my respect on that. I think it’s hard to write about them because they like to keep their lives so hidden and private, whereas the k-poppers are constantly having secrets revealed and whatnot. Good job on that!

Flow: 9/10
Flow was near perfect. Not too fast, and not too slow.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
No one, I repeat, NO ONE in the history and future of the world will ever have an error-free story. The only author that’s come close is J.K Rowling, and she probably has half of England editing her books. I didn’t find too many mistakes, but there were some common typing errors that everyone and their grandma makes. Just keep doing what you’re doing and watch your spelling and grammar.

Characterization: 9/10
Since I am Uruha-biased, you didn’t delve too much into his background or any of the other minor characters’ backgrounds. But, everyone else was perfect. I loved Kai in this story. Usually I just think of him as the “adorkable” drummer, but here he seemed like…well, the perfect lover. :)

Writing Style: 7/10
You confused me on some things. Mention when the viewpoint is going to change, because when you changed to Aoi, I was like, “Whoa, wait. What’s going on?” Just a little reminder at the top of the chapter will do.

Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Ya hooked me. That’s all I got to say. ^^

Sub Total: 84/100

Bonus: 5/5
GAZEDORKS FTW!!!

Total: 89/100